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RWBY: Black's episode SUCKS: How to Fix

Journal Entry: Fri Apr 5, 2013, 12:05 AM

My Commission Tracking Journal:

I really hated this episode/trailer. Video linked below, with reasons listed under the video. Edit: added links to the superior Red and White videos, and I highly recommend watching them:

Red… and White… were so much better.

Character Design
So she's another generic looking cat-girl who's boring, boring to look at, and her outfit looks stupid. Her voice acting is BAD. I've heard 4kids stuff sound better than this. And why did she betray him at the end? If I wanted a sex fetish chick with ears, I'd go hang out on FA where they're at least drawn better. A gun/whip blade? Again? She's a lamer version of Red (who at least was deadly) unlike Black.

 Lol What?
This is not how I was expecting the 3rd main member to be dressed for combat.

Don't Overshadow the Main Character!
Also, why is the male character, Adam, not only more interesting, but way more cool and effective. His sword with a shotgun sheath was far more effective at killing stuff than that retarded whip/gun thing. His design stands out, has more charm than whatever that overstuffed blouse + hotpants + overcoat visual mess that Black wore. Yeah, sure, design lifted from Code Geass and bleach, but at least HE was interesting! If you're going to tell a story about four different girls doing badass things with tragedy and pain as a backdrop, THEN DON'T HAVE THE SIDE MALE CHARACTER OVERSHADOW HER!

Knock knock, Viz here, we want our copyright back now.

I wasn't paying attention to the forgettable music because the terrible voice acting, blurry animation, and boring fight scene got in the way. Which is a HUGE shame, because I love the music in Red and White.

Character Design - Fix
What needed to have happened is something that Red Letter Media said about Obi Wan and Qui-Gon Jinn. There needs to be a re-write where Adam and Ms. Boring are merged into one character called Blake. She'd have the design of Adam (with a female body of course) and his katana shotgun instead of another re-hashed gun scythe/whip thing. And she'd be alone, or with a revamped Adam being a helicopter pilot or something playing backup or transport in the background trying to keep up with her antics and gun/swordplay. Then Blake would be interesting, have a real role other than side-kick and she wouldn't look like a badly drawn attempt at ripping off Zatana from Young Justice. At least the Code Geass mask and Renji's hair/outfit from Bleach looked cool and distinct.

I thought I'd leave this video with one final comment:
I'd rather hang out on 4-chan during Caturday while beating off to images on Fur Affinity with the 4-Kids version of One Piece looping in the background than endure this abomination one more time. I'm going to go watch Red massacre hordes of werewolves, and then go watch Code Geass, because this cheap knock off isn't worth my time.

Here's hoping that Yellow makes up for this mess.

And the worst offense of all. She's supposed to be one of the four main women!

Adam: "Let's do this!" - Adam taking charge and displaying leadership.

Adam: "Buy me some time!" - oh yeah Blake is so important . 'go distract it for me, so I, Adam can do something badass and effective.'

Ms. Boring: "Are you sure?" - are you sure? wtf? do you not know you're fighting to survive? do you not know Adam's powers?

Ms. Boring: "goodbye...." - what? what just happened? did little miss sidekick really just abandon the guy who just one shot a giant mech? why?

And this is our third lead guys.
oh yeah, i bet her story is going to be so awesome...

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Aerrow235 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
ok, seriously. Its a Katana/Cleaver/TEC DC-9/ Chain Scythe... That's pretty obvious, and you would have picked it up, if you weren't busy looking for flaws.
if you're going to watch a show, watch it for the plot, and the content/action.
Don't look for its flaws, and point them out to other people.
That's a Critics Job.
Are you a Critic?
Didn't think so.
SEMC Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Trailer. Not show. Learn to read. Also look at the date. Perhaps observation and reason are not yours to command. Also, reading a wiki to understand a show/episode/trailer/book is a failure in presentation and story telling. Still haven't watched the show, and people like you are a good example of why not.
Walter666bonham Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
Damn what a storm of opposite opinions. makes for good reading. Neat review of the Black trailer. That I have to say.
SEMC Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you liked it. Been a while and people are still finding this thing.
Walter666bonham Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013
I was bored and wanted to know the community response to RWBY. You didn't disappoint.
SEMC Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad I could help. I honestly haven't watched the show yet, and at the time I wrote this, the yellow trailer hadn't even come out yet. My appraisal of the show as seen from the trailers and the first half of the first episode is: I'm curious, but I'm gonna wait until I'm bored before I feel like slogging through a shitty American Engrish dubbed anime. If I can get access to the Japanese dubs (someone else below you mentioned that they might exist soon) with English subs, then I'll try harder.
Walter666bonham Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013
I haven't watched it either. I waited till all the episodes are out. I plan to watch it soon. I am going to take it with a grain of salt and treat it like Season 1 of RvB meaning it might be rough in some points (Even Though season 1 was manly saved by Caboose and the writing). Also that hopefully the voice acting will improve next season and on.
SEMC Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well let me know what you think. I'll probably watch it on my own later this week. Might as well see what all the fuss was about.
PunisherLex Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
All I see here is that your only working your data from Monty Oums trailer episodes, how about you come back after watching the full first season

SEMC Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Because all I reviewed was the trailer. That was the point.
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